What do you guys think of the song I have just written, any constructive criticism, and should I write more?

I love it, I like how it tells a story and the rhyming, it flows really nicely too! The only thing u might want to do is shorten the verses so it's not so wordy so it's not like a poem, but keep the rhyming! U should write more, just think u did this good on ur first one, with more practice they will get better! Congrats! :)